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Old 16-02-07, 03:28 AM
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Default Coyote Heaven.

7.5 x 12.5 inch... crits please.


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Old 16-02-07, 09:50 AM
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WOW! Jason, I can see and feel this breeze, my best advice for you at this point would be to paint at least 3000 more paintings ASAP. Awesome... The color is great and the look of texture you've achieved is very cool. Are you able to post some larger details of this piece?
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Old 16-02-07, 10:34 AM
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Well done!
quite realistic and still rather poetic...

Does anyone know how many cm makes an inch??
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Old 16-02-07, 03:09 PM
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Very fine, plus all of the above. That coyote could enjoy that breeze if she weren't so damn hungry.
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Old 16-02-07, 04:42 PM
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Really Verry nice Jason. You can just feel that breeze! Nice depth of colour.
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Old 16-02-07, 09:19 PM
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Brilliant, Jason! Nice dramatic tension. Can't find anything to criticise!
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Old 16-02-07, 09:54 PM
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Jason
Yup, good work. Myself I do have a slight problem with the bottom left corner...I've had probs with corners before not knowing what to put in and then slightly overdoing it....it grabs my eye but doesn't lead me into the subject. It keeps distracting me!!
Also the purple flowers, maybe have them strengthened around the coyote and then less defined the further away from the subject you go. I think the top background
and left ground could be a little less busy... it would then make you focus on the coyote and the atmosphere you have so well achieved, as Salamander says, you can feel that breeze (however I don't feel the breeze on the plants). If you cover up some of the image just see how much more strength you gain around the coyote. These crits are all so subjective, I admire all who put up there work here. I wouldn't change anything now, the painting would loose any spontineity but maybe a few pointers for the future..........others will disagree....but that is art!!!
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Old 17-02-07, 05:13 AM
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Well done!
quite realistic and still rather poetic...

Does anyone know how many cm makes an inch??
Sabine,

There are 2.54 centimetres to the inch. So the picture is approximately 19 x 32 cm.

Steve
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Old 19-02-07, 01:49 AM
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Absolutely fabulous Jason! I do agree with Rob M about the bottom left corner, but that is just an opinion, it is no critique, wouldn't dream of it after all it is just a matter of taste. The animal is so beautiful I found that grey bush a bit distracting. Personally I would not let anything distract from that so well painted animal.
Greetings, Alex.
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Old 19-02-07, 06:27 AM
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Jason, I have been pondering the comment that Rob made (and more recently Alex) about the bottom left corner of your painting and for what it is worth, I disagree with them. I think the grey colour area with its shapes and texture reflects some of the elements in the coyote and harmonizes with it. Because the grey shape cuts diagonally across the corner I think it helps to lead ones eye up the left side of the painting and back around into the main part of the picture. The field in your work is beautifully rendered with it's lush colours and texture! Very well done! David
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