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Old 09-08-07, 07:14 PM
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Esperanza - 11x14 on panel

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Old 10-08-07, 07:30 AM
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You are consistently good Alex! ( And new and different) Keep it up!
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Old 10-08-07, 07:40 AM
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Alex,
Beautiful work. A little larger than the earlier ones, too, right?
Just one thing is a little confusing to me: I can't quite figure out where the dark field behind the figure fits into the depicted space. (Perhaps it's clearer in the painting than on the web image.)
Since the little porch roof comes in front of the dark area, at that point it seems to be a wall of a building across the street and in plane with the yellow brick facade, or perhaps an open space behind it. But since we don't see a continuation of the sidewalk over at the lower right, it kind of reads like a nearby wall, receding into space, and directly behind the figure in the foreground. Maybe you could add just a small visual clue to better indicate what and where the wall/plane is. That is, unless you want to keep the ambiguity because you're rendering a sort of dream space or mental picture...
Anyway, that's the only thing I could think to mention that gave me pause.
Please let me know if I'm overlooking the obvious. It is late as I view it.
Thanks for sharing it!
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Old 10-08-07, 04:17 PM
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Thanks Eric.

Dennis,

Thank you for your thoughts. My wife had a similar response to that area as well. I need to go back and see if I can resolve some of those issues. I see exactly what you mean.
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Old 10-08-07, 09:16 PM
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Fine painting, Alex!
For me, the unresolved dark area behind the figure gives it a mysterious quality - as if she's connected to the background, but disconnected at the same time. The roof over the door has an almost Dali-esque quality. It's flat across the front, but apparently goes back a level at the top...?
Anyway, the expression is very natural, unposed, and the painting works very well for me.
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Old 11-08-07, 06:28 PM
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Phil, Thank you for your thoughts. Some of the things you see are very interesting.
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Old 13-08-07, 10:19 AM
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Old 13-08-07, 09:15 PM
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Excellent rendition of the subject.
I have a little problem of what my eye sees and what my brain tells me. All to do with the porch roof and the wall structure.
The lighting is directly above,judging from the shadow of the porch roof but more from the left as suggested by the person. My problem is the recess in the roof, is it the longer edge that is further back or the shorter edge. I can read it either way and find it fun to do so. Having studied the possibilities of the building I am assuming that the right side of the building has a pillar that projects forward so if you want to prevent the illusion I see I would suggest that the darker area above the roof be lightened to coincide with the lighting of the person and even a high light placed on the forward projecting part of that section of wall to throw it forward......hope I explained that OK.
Like Phil, I do like the mystery of the area behind the figure. Just one more very small point.....I would have liked to have seen a little more space between the figure and the edge of the building or even overlap the figure with the building.
Great work.
Rob
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Old 14-08-07, 02:09 AM
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Aha! That's what it is: I visualized the roof as receeding on the RIGHT side, which would have made the straight front impossible. But apparently it receeds on the LEFT side, which makes more sense. Rob's reply cleared it up for me.
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Old 14-08-07, 08:55 PM
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Took me ages to figure it out..............my excuse is my age...what's yours Phil??
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